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Frozen in time by AnnaKirsten

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This is a beautiful piece that you have made. I love the fractal patterns in the trees and how they translate throughout the left hand side. I also love the birds. And that this is a piece for japan makes me smile. My inner mathematician is smiling right now.

I think you need to design more symmetry into your piece. The right side does not have the same fractal-esque beauty that the left side has. I think that you could have gone or go in two directions for this piece to make it even better then it already is. One suggestion is that you go with a different yet still curved fractal pattern on the right instead of a smudge /ripple effect. This will keep the flow of the water constant in your piece but nothing will be lost in the meaning like i feel happens on your right side currently. The other way is to go with more of a Mandelbrot like pattern to keep the infinity but using its shape to create more of a defined region for you to express yourself in.
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ReptillianSP2011 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student General Artist
What would you say about cropping? That's more than enough to remove the unpleasant side of the right side. I like the image though.
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AnnaKirsten Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for taking the time to give this critique. It's kind of you to do so.

I'm not sure where you got the idea this is a piece for Japan from - I never thought of that before, but I guess there is a kind of Oriental feel to the work.

So far as your suggestions are concerned, I find it hard to visualise what you have in mind to be honest, unless you're referring to doing something different to leaving the existence of the ripple effect up and down on the right-hand side.. Yes I could do something there by adding something in a new layer, but I chose to leave it as it was for the sake of simplicity and leave it more open to interpretation. It occurs to me (thinking about Japan) that it could even represent a tsunami occurrence...

I can see what I think you mean though, that maybe the vertical ripple effect is a little distracting to some people. Personally I don't mind that. And to be honest, I'm not at all keen on symmetry - in fact I mostly dislike it.

Thanks again for the trouble :)

Take care :)
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jim373 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   Digital Artist
Don't you just love it when people say... "Oh, you should have done it this way, it would have been much better!!" ?!?
:lmao: :rofl: :no:
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AnnaKirsten Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012   General Artist
Well I guess I asked for it by requesting a critique! :lol:

It can be interesting to hear what others would have done and one can simply agree to disagree ;)
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jim373 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012   Digital Artist
That's why I never ask for critiques... if I wanted
someone to tell me how I should do it, they might as
well just do it themselves!! :rofl: :lmao:
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AnnaKirsten Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012   General Artist
I think all too often that's sadly the case. I probably won't ask again.
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jim373 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012   Digital Artist
I did it once.. that was all it took to convince me it's not a good idea! :D :lmao:
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ElRinaZuza Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Nice work done! I love when people are fair enough, but I think that you should put much more paragraphs next time.
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